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    Schools of Trevalles on the Ningaloo Reef, Western Australia

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e4b2YtGw_VQ

    Hey everybody,
    I recently returned to the place where I spent my entire working holiday in Australia, namely Coral Bay by the Ningaloo Reef.
    I went to go back in order to film a few episodes of the things I saw whilest snorkeling out on the inner reef duing my first visit.

    This is the first episode ( out of 3 ) and features the large schools of trevallies that you can find on the outer parts of the inner reef.
    Luckely I got most of the shots I was hoping for.
    Looking forward to hear what people think, and any constructive critiscim is appreciated.

    OBS:Snorkeling this far offshore is a bad idea unless you are fit, careful and an experienced snorkeler.

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    There are some really stunning clips in there, filming technique is good.

    But you've hidden them away in unnecessary graphics, effects and a protracted introduction.

    Its way too long, 8.5 minutes, of which 3.5 is intro screens, a further 3 preamble, is a marathon.... And you say you've got two more of these? Why do you need to take so long and be so slow? Who do you want to watch it.

    You're obviously talented with the camera, and can edit, with effects and graphic design.

    But you need to work on your story telling, how to keep your audience engaged.... Each clip, graphic, effect, should be there to tell a part of the overall story, once its done its job, move on, keep the story flowing. The way it looks to me, you're coming at it from the other direction, using the story as an excuse to show off your various artistic abilities.

    Although with that said, if that is your intention (to show off your artistic ability) then that's the story. Ditch the text, and pretence around the documentary element, run the visuals as an artistic piece. (and make it shorter)
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    What he said. I got angry and frustrated quite early on.
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    My efforts at Ningaloo nine years ago:





    Enjoyed our time there immensely but oh boy was Navy pier expensive - enjoyed it tho!
    Last edited by Eddie Clamp; 09-05-2020 at 10:37 AM.

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    I managed to watch all of it just. High quality but a bit like over processed still images too long and the slow mo just there with no real reason sometimes.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Divemouse View Post
    What he said. I got angry and frustrated quite early on.
    Agree with Stuart and I got bored quite early.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Divemouse View Post
    What he said. I got angry and frustrated quite early on.
    Not just me then?

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    Some great images, but even running at double speed I gave up.


 

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